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Why Would You? by ~practicingartist:iconpracticingartist:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Spoken Word


I look out the window


and I cannot smile.


Everything is just so


so


bright. Ever since you left


they’ve kept me in this place.


I imagine a jail


is much like this.


They rarely allow me to


leave this room. It tries so hard


to disguise itself as a homey


relaxed place. But I know


when I look out the window


that this place is nothing


like what I remember.


They say I need all of this medication


because you went away.


They can say


whatever they want to. I know


that you left for your


own reasons. It wasn’t really me


necessarily. If it was, I don’t mind


that you left


that you are gone.


Wherever you are


do not worry about me.


Do not feel guilty


do not cry. Even if you wanted to


come back –


why would you?
©2007-2008 ~practicingartist
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Can be considered an accompaniment to my photograph: [link] . :)
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~crazyone100:iconcrazyone100: May 24, 2007, 11:26:05 AM
This makes feel really calm when I read it.
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~Akatsuki-Dawn:iconAkatsuki-Dawn: May 25, 2007, 7:06:59 PM
woah.. that was really good :)
~SilverDragon3513:iconSilverDragon3513: May 26, 2007, 2:48:21 PM
dam*!
tat thome powerphul thtuph..........nithe picc by se way :)

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They only stop when they're asleep-AND SOME OF THEM SLEEP TALK!!!!!!!!
~practicingartist:iconpracticingartist: May 26, 2007, 3:52:12 PM
Thanks. :D I'm using that photo as my background right now. :paranoid:

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I have the heart of a child. I keep it in a jar on my shelf. - Robert Bloch.
~BlackPhoenixRising:iconBlackPhoenixRising: Jun 2, 2007, 1:05:18 PM
cool. you use the word "place" three times w/in nine lines. Really love the end of the poem.

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~Eye2Soul:iconEye2Soul: Jun 2, 2007, 6:04:03 PM
I know you're probably not supposed to pause at the end of the lines here where there's no punctuation but I did when I read it first. Maybe because there was double spacing between them. It gave me this feeling of someone talking with long pauses for breath at irregular points which was nice and disturbing, given the nature of the poem. Someone who is all drugged and locked up and despairing. I really liked this. :heart:

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All beauty must die. Muahaha.
~practicingartist:iconpracticingartist: Jun 2, 2007, 6:35:15 PM
Just my attempt to make ' place' a proper noun. :P Thanks for telling me that, though I don't know if I can change it or not.
Glad you liked the end. :)

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I have the heart of a child. I keep it in a jar on my shelf. - Robert Bloch.
~practicingartist:iconpracticingartist: Jun 9, 2007, 11:46:43 AM
Actually, that's how I'd prefer it to be read. Glad you liked it! : D

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I have the heart of a child. I keep it in a jar on my shelf. - Robert Bloch.
~themistsayshello:iconthemistsayshello: Jun 11, 2007, 10:34:10 PM
Ohh. So pretty. I love the simple words that add to the serene air of the poem. I want to say somber, but serene works better... I guess. Who am I to say?
-love the line breaks too. it adds to the [well now somber works better]mood.

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